Too plangent. No, make it less lachrymose, but keep the trite death speech.
太悲哀。不行,不要写得这么催泪,但老掉牙的寻死觅活要继续。
英语百科
Lament
(重定向自Plangent)
A lament or lamentation is a passionate expression of grief, often in music, poetry, or song form. The grief is most often born of regret, or mourning. Laments can also be expressed in a verbal manner, where the participant would lament about something they regret or someone they've lost, usually accompanied by wailing, moaning and/or crying.